KSI UNDERDOGG

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I never believed in diamonds until I seen your shiny eyes

Never seen something so bright until I seen your smile

Never seen something so beautiful until I laid my eyes on you

You are my world and forever in my heart there's never a time where  you crossed my mine

Because when I close my eyes you're all I see

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On 12/21/2018 at 1:23 AM, KSI UNDERDOGG said:

I never believed in diamonds until I seen your shiny eyes

Never seen something so bright until I seen your smile

Never seen something so beautiful until I laid my eyes on you

You are my world and forever in my heart there's never a time where  you crossed my mine

Because when I close my eyes you're all I see

I like the gist of it overall. One thing that throws me is your use of the word "seen". YOU are the subject, therefore past tense of "see" for you would be "saw". Other than that, kinda cool. 

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