Reeses - Halo 4

[Reeses 9]

Halo 4 is coming soon there will be new weapons and a new way to play multiplayer and after finishing Halo 3 all those years ago we had pretty much faced the fact that we would never see Master Chief and all his exploits ever again. A video game saga that had transformed the Xbox into an iconic console and turned many gamers into a first person shooter fans was thought to have met its end by many. But now, nearly five years later, Master Chief is making a comeback this December on Halo 4. Halo 4 is making its way to being one of the most talked about games of the year. It might not look quite as slick as the CGI, but immediately the thing that struck me was what an overhaul the graphics had. Rather than the slightly meager update of Halo Reach, this is a totally new look for Halo.

There has been a bit of trepidation about the title, given that the immense responsibility of Halo now lies with 343 Industries and not Bungie. Some people say 343 Industries will mess up Halo and make it less exciting but in all honesty most Halo fans just want to play it. And now, finally, we get to. Halo 4 is introducing the forerunners and an entirely new race of enemies called Prometheans. "Never before has Master Chief been so incredibly detailed, nor has the Halo environment just looked so good." As some people have said. The guns themselves, of which there are many, handle almost exactly the same as those in the earlier games. Most of them have brand new designs and if I did have to make one criticizing remark, it is that there is a fairly restricted amount of ammunition on offer, leading us to adopt a slightly different play style. The usual blast everything, throw a ton of grenades and then run it melee style on the leftovers just didn’t seem to work.

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[KSI twahl 7 3]

Nice pictures man, once my Internet decides to work again I will try to edit it! I see some things already but editing on my phone is extremely difficult. I haven't read all of it yet, but just knowing that its halo, I assume it will be awesome!

[Badfur 13]

A few things, first. Pictures are nice, but not when they are in the middle of an article. Opening with a picture, and then closing with one isn't a bad way of doing things, but putting on in the center, especially one as large as the one you chose, completely breaks the article up. My suggestion is, if you really are dead set on having a picture in the middle, scale it way down so that it is unobtrusive, but still understandable. As it is right now, it is far too large. It would probably need to be about a quarter of the size of the second picture to remain in the center. I suggest just scaling it down by about 60% and putting it up top.

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Halo 4 is coming soon, there will be new weapons, and a new way to play multiplayer. and After finishing Halo 3, all those years ago we had pretty much faced the fact that we would never see Master Chief and all his exploits ever again.[As a player, I'm going to have to disagree with you on this last sentence. Didn't you see the footage of John just drifting in space after you beat the campaign? There was no indication that Master Chief wouldn't ever be seen again. Which makes me wonder why you choose the say this in the sentence. Thoughts?] A video game saga that had transformed the Xbox into an iconic console, and turned many gamers into a first person shooter fans, was thought to have met its end by many. But [Don't start a sentence with 'But'] Now, nearly five years later, Master Chief is making a comeback this December on Halo 4. Halo 4 is making its way to being one of the most talked about games of the year. It might not look quite as slick as the CGI, but immediately the thing that struck me was what an overhaul the graphics had.[i feel this sentence is lacking. It doesn't quite fit in place, and makes very little sense, to me. Twahl might have more to say on it.] Rather [Don't use 'rather' to start a sentence. It is usually, like 'but' something that you use after a comma. Also, consider rephrasing this sentence. >>>] than the slightly meager update of Halo Reach, this is a totally new look for Halo.

There has been a bit of trepidation about the title, given that the immense responsibility of Halo now lies with 343 Industries and not Bungie. Some people say 343 Industries will mess up Halo and make it less exciting but in all honesty most Halo fans just want to play it. And now, finally, we get to. [Don't start a sentence with 'and', also, this sentence makes no sense. It seems to be an extension of the previous sentence, in which case there shouldn't be a period after 'play it'.] Halo 4 is introducing the forerunners[the forerunners aren't exactly new, as players have already run into 343 Guilty Spark and the Sentinels, devices made by the Forerunners. To 'introduce' them, is to imply that they are new.] and an entirely new race of enemies called Prometheans. "Never before has Master Chief been so incredibly detailed, nor has the Halo environment just looked so good." As some people have said.[Who said this?] The guns themselves, of which there are many, handle almost exactly the same as those in the earlier games.[This sentence should be rephrased. Yes, I understand what you mean by it, but there are better ways to phrase it. 'The dog, of which has 4 legs, and great strength, jumped to a height greater than, and then over, the fence.' That is a very lengthy way of saying 'The dog jumped over the fence.' I understand what you mean, it is just that there are simpler ways of saying it.] Most of them have brand new designs [so, you're saying the guns have been redesigned?] and if I did have to make one criticizing remark, it is that there is a fairly restricted amount of ammunition on offer, leading us to adopt a slightly different play style.[it's a new game and new playing field, of course play style will be different, more on this below.] The usual blast everything, throw a ton of grenades and then run it melee style on the leftovers just didn’t seem to work. [Clearly, you have never played any of the games on heroic or legendary. That style of play will get you killed in less than a minute on the first level.]

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First up, center your article.

Next, is this a review? It doesn't sound like you are intending to review the game (as it isn't out yet), and if you are, then I'm telling you to rewrite the whole thing. No one writes a review for a game they haven't played. For reference, read this:

http://www.talknerdytomelover.com/home/2012/9/30/nerdsunite-confessions-of-a-videogame-journalist.html

If you aren't reviewing the game, then write objectively. You use "I, me, we", a lot. Unless you are writing a review, I highly advise against it. The point of this article is to convey information about the game, and how it is different or similar to previous games in the series, right? In this case, use information and facts, don't make it subjective. If you need an example of what I mean, look here: www.ksiforums.org/index.php?/topic/8039-guild-wars-2/ That is an article that I wrote on Guild Wars 2. The game hadn't come out yet, but I was able to provide an objective view, while keeping all the information based on facts.

Twahl, if you have any edits or comments, don't let what I've put here stop you. If you disagree, or would prefer to phrase something differently, by all means voice what you think.

[Reeses 9]

Ok man thanks for your help I will be sure to fix the mistakes before Sunday.

[Badfur 13]

You do realize that it is Monday now, right? As in it should have been fixed and submitted by last night.

[Reeses 9]

I wrote this one for this coming up Sunday.

[Badfur 13]

Also, please hop on skype, we use it as a means of communication, all members of the news team should be on skype.

[Reeses 9]

Ok I am sorry. I will try to get on it tonight. I tried making an account on ksiglobal.org but everytime I try to sign in it tells me my account could not be found. I don't know what to do about that.

[KSI twahl 7 3]

Can you please post your most recent edits so me and badfur can confirm whether you can post or not? Its been a little while now...